My poem: Truth

Category: Writers Block

Post 1 by mouse6687 (I am #1) on Friday, 21-Nov-2008 15:54:13

Truth


It is surreal

The feelings in the dreams I have

Where you and I are next to one another

I can't let them excape my brain

But to keep them captive isn't just

My heart's heavy when you're on my mind

I can't just let you go

Passionate kisses in the night

Just so your friends wouldn't know

I'm the black spot on your heart

Left to be nothing but just that

I'll never have you as my own

But I'll know that I've had the best of you

Meaningless hurtful words said out of rage doesn't make you bad (evil)

They're in the past to be put behind us

We've moved on, especially you

Just remember what they say

Never fuck someone you don't want to love.

10:41 pm

Post 2 by Miss Gorgeous (I'm going for the prolific poster awards!) on Monday, 24-Nov-2008 15:24:58

Nice, well done. This is a good poem. Good descriptions. s there a story behind those dreams that pursuaded you to write this poem? Wow, you did a good job. I like the way you wrote this poem. Nice job. The last phrase made it good. You wrote this poem to communicate your impression toward a situation. This poem also means hope because you mentioned about the posibilities of moving on. Keep on writing.